Posted: 27 June 2007 09:59 PM   [ Ignore ]
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Please edit this forum post to introduce
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Posted: 04 July 2007 04:16 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 1 ]
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1. There’s a typo or typos at the end.  What IS the end?
2.  I’d like to see more dialogue and character development through dialogue.
 
Otherwise it’s a good idea!

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Posted: 04 July 2007 12:29 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 2 ]
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The last sentence—I assume this is what you’re referring to—goes “And Jim was sure that in Canterbury, it was regarded as proof that virtue of a certain sort did not go unrewarded. ”  Canceling out the double negative, which is deliberate, it means that in Canterbury, a snob town, virtue of a certain sort is rewarded.  This is ironic, since Susan Soderborg is a dull girl, and marrying her out of ambition, which is what Bob does, isn’t especially virtuous. Hope this makes things clearer, I don’t see a typo.

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Posted: 04 July 2007 08:16 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 3 ]
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JWB,
The last sentence in your story, as submitted, was:

And Jim was sure that in Canterbury, it was regarded as proof that virtue of a ce

Hence Julia’s confusion, not to mention (oops!) my consternation.  I’ve edited it for you.

Dave.

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Posted: 05 July 2007 12:48 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 4 ]
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Thanks.  I guess the highlight-copy didn’t pick up everything!

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Posted: 02 August 2007 12:13 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 5 ]
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Wow, this is really good (now that I can figure out the end)!

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Posted: 02 August 2007 12:38 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 6 ]
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Thanks!

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