Posted: 30 July 2013 11:47 AM   [ Ignore ]
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Joined  2011-11-29

What could be edited out to shorten this?

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Posted: 03 May 2012 12:57 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 1 ]
Total Posts:  286
Joined  2006-07-29


Again, I really enjoyed this piece. I enjoy your creativity and imagination and the way you’re able to make the impossible come across as matter of fact. This was a fun read, although I found the ending a little rushed and wanting for a little more, um, punch? I’m not sure exactly what it lacked for me, so I’m unfortunately not much help there - maybe a twist or something to balance the novelty and quirkiness of the rest of the story.

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Editing your stuff: Because an apostrophe is often all that stands between writers who know their shit and writers who know they’re shit.

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