Posted: 04 September 2008 10:48 AM   [ Ignore ]
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What could be edited out to shorten this?

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Posted: 16 November 2008 01:47 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 1 ]
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Hi tobiash,

I don’t know that it NEEDS to be shortened. I really enjoyed the flow and the images. To me, it looks great just the way it is - smooth and rythmic. Editing something out might take away from that.

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