Hi stone,
I found the idea behind your story very interesting. I thought at first that it was a little short, but after re-reading it I changed my mind. Your idea had been conveyed, and there wasn’t a need for more words.
Where does this story come from? I feel it will invoke a different feeling in every reader. A small suggestion - re-read carefully and take care of those few typos 
They tend to distract the mind from the flow of the piece.
Well done, looking forward to reading more of your stories.
- Star
