Hey Rreed,
What a funny little piece
I loved your backhand sarcastic writing style and really enjoyed the way you used the donkey - sorry, donkeyS! - in there. The sillyness just adds to the tone of your story.
I felt it ended a bit quickly at first - you developed the plot and I was expecting to see it through - but on re-reading it, I feel it fits nicely with the flow of the rest of the story. I wouldn’t add to it I don’t think, and it doesn’t need to be longer in my opinion.
Thanks for a great read!
- Star