Posted: 11 January 2009 02:44 PM   [ Ignore ]
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What did you like most?

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Posted: 22 February 2009 08:21 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 1 ]
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I thought that this was an ambitious piece, an attempt to set a story in medieval times, using medieval concepts and medieval English.  Some of your descriptions were magnificent - the description of the crossing at the beginning, for instance - but I did feel that the impact of the story was lost a little because of its length.

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Posted: 22 February 2009 10:51 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 2 ]
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Thanks - it is a sequel story (the first one was called Lucifer’s Crown) and there is soon to be the final part called “Death and Other Cities”.....but I’ll make sure it’s shorter!!! cool ;>)
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Posted: 22 February 2009 03:13 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 3 ]
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OK.  I’ll look out for “Death and other Cities”.  In fact, send me a pm when you publish it, Dean.

Rosemary

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