Tuesday, January 16, 2007

A Pattern

Category: Poetry/Lyrics
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  • I’ve read this a few times now and I only just noticed that the meter is really cool, except in the last two stanzas where it breaks for me.  Lemme see about fixing this line:
    Don lost his wife at sixty-three, a lifelong friend
    Don at sixty-three lost his wife and best friend

    Am I the only one who feels the improvement in the meter here?

    Posted by .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)  on  02/08  at  11:38 PM
  • It IS a weird, actual meter.  I’ve read this a few times, too.  I think it’s one of those things that has its own music.

    Posted by julianyway  on  03/03  at  01:51 AM
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