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Wednesday, November 02, 2005

Animal Stand Up

Category: Short Story
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  • Kinda’ like William Burroughs catching a buzz with Captain Kangaroo…. Me likey…

    Posted by deminizer  on  11/02  at  07:50 PM
  • This was pretty good - got a few laughs out of it.  But the end kind of fizzled for me.  Some misspellings and confusing quotes are there at tehe end too.  You can edit, so have at it.

    Maybe it’s because I’m American, but “What the hell you need the time for?” makes a lot more sense as an asnwer to “What’s the fucking time?” than “Time for what?”  No answer at all before “I’m a Zebra…” would work best, I think.  It kind of threw me off.  Let me know if you change the ending around - I might rank this higher.

    Also, your stuff will do better if you rank it above everything else - kind of give it a foothold.  I assume you’ve read some of the other stuff, and as a pretty good writer, your opinion of it would help us find the best stuff.  Could earn you a few bucks too.

    Posted by .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)  on  11/03  at  12:48 AM
  • The picture created had me laughing way before the jokes came:
        ....lights wearing his best toothy smile..
    I like choice of characters,animals are naturaly very humorous creatures.

    Posted by .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)  on  11/03  at  04:04 AM
  • The paragraphs are too long.

    Posted by julianyway  on  05/18  at  03:23 PM
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