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Monday, August 19, 2013
Endless summer
Category: Poetry/LyricsOn the edge of summer, the dusk of unbridled passions,
My heart waned with the burning foliage, the blushing leaves,
The gasping grass, all paining for the kiss of summer, the constant sun
Blessing them with his presence. How I wish that glorious god would rest
His hand upon me! Perhaps I wouldn’t fall under the curse of Autumn’s sorrow.
And as if dear Venus had peered deep into the shady regions of my heart
And asked if the reflection of the sun, the glory of light, this dearest Apollo
To woo my heart with his golden tongue, his flawless features and razor wit,
To invite me onto his couch, onto his gorgeous bed.
Now all I see when I look at you is the rising of the sun,
The dawn of bracing heat, virile flowers, lush fields and crystal lakes
Still waltzing on the breeze, free from the bonds of ice, the cold breath
Of Hades. All I see is unbridled passion, the smoldering fire I’m swept under
With no strength to resurface. The sting of love has soused me with your affections,
Your kisses always welcome.
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Has a nice cadence. The razor wit line is sweet. Would be easier to read if their were breaks, so might want to play with the format.
The breaks are much better, makes it an easier read. Awesome job.