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Friday, February 09, 2007

I Wonder

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I wonder how many cuts I can make
How many smiles I can fake
In the time it takes you realise
That you love me,
To open your eyes

I wonder how many times I’ll curse
And feel things can’t get much worse
Until you take a deep breath
And convince me,
Of love until death

I wonder how many lies I’ll swallow
In the hope that it ends my sorrow
Believing you’re the one for me
Maybe,
I’m the one who needs to open my eyes to see

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  • This (I wonder) popped up before my eyes, across from Kitty’s entry ...when I arrived at Litmocracy.  ...and as I was reading it(as it had been a Friday night, all of us havin’ a Kitchen Pairty on the Shores o’ PEI…[do re me P-E-I]), I thought how well the two would go together as a song.

    One thing could follow the other, and they could float across each other, so that each thing was its own thing, with the other thing as the background music. 

    If you could see them juxtaposed, the way I do. 
    I don’t know how to arrange that.  Maybe Dave (God) can! 

    Cheers!

    Posted by julianyway  on  02/10  at  01:38 AM
  • That last line really made it for me.  Maybe / I’m the one who needs to open my eyes to see.  This is a sadly neglected and devastatingly underused sentiment.  I wanted more of a build up to it.  Maybe Julie’s right about mixing them together.  Counterpoint-like.

    Posted by .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)  on  02/10  at  05:30 PM
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