Monday, August 29, 2011


Category: Poetry/Lyrics

Black-tipped fins,
black-tipped wings,
black-lipped things
that smile through the seaweed,
their squid-ink-smeared faces alight.
A sliver of gold
for their blunt teeth to hold
and they slither away in delight.

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  • This is very pretty. I wrote a poem about mermaids once. Let me see if I can find it. Here it is:

    The Mermaid’s Kiss

    Her eyes were luminescent fish
    Her hands were silver swans
    Her hair was as the breath of horses stamping in their stalls
    Her arms were boats, finely carved and fitted for the sea
    And as the sea too were her lips
    Sweet and salty like a mermaid’s kiss
    Her breasts were as the dimpled hills
    And I saw her and felt her there
    Like a carnival she was
    All color and delight
    And when I took her in my arms
    There was the swoon of birds
    And the smile of a choppy sea

    Not as pretty as yours. What is it about mermaids that makes us so metaphorical?

    Posted by tobiash  on  08/30  at  08:06 AM
  • Gotta disagree I’m afraid, I think yours is way prettier - there’s something very old-fashioned-romantic about it, and it’s nicely quirky as well.

    Personally, I’ve never really bought into the idea of mermaids being beautiful though. If you look at all the creatures that live at the bottom of the ocean, most of them look pretty disgusting!

    Posted by .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)  on  08/30  at  02:40 PM
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