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Tuesday, December 11, 2007

Three Guys Over

Category: Short Story
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  • Any chance I can get more specific feedback on what you guys think of this one?

    Posted by .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)  on  12/21  at  11:50 PM
  • Hi TG,

    You might want to post some of your reactions to others’ submissions in the forums and let them know there that you’re looking for feedback.  You can even provide a link to this story.

    I don’t like the idea of an eating contest, so take my feedback with a grain of salt wink.  I like the background - Kobayashi’s history, the day trader, Allen, and the girl protecting herself from possible spew, but I kind of wanted more to tie all that together.  The redeeming quality for me is that this story shows how a physical skill can be better executed when the mind is occupied, and that progress can be made through effort.

    Posted by .(JavaScript must be enabled to view this email address)  on  12/30  at  02:21 PM
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