I felt you repeated yourself a lot throughout this piece and some of the sentences and phrases were too ‘wordy’. And, in some parts, it just seemed as if you were getting bored and rushing to finish it. However, that being said, if you are not a native English speaker, you’e done extremely well. Congratulations.

I had a problem with this chunk:

Nobody would listen to a little girl, especially if she is convinced that disaster is just lurking around the corner, waiting for the chance to strike.

No one would forget the predictions the little girl made once they came true.  Perhaps you can explain it away by saying that you tried to tell someone once or twice, but instead of being praised for the clairvoyance, you were blamed and people said you made it happen.  People shoot the messenger all the time.  So you decided to never tell anyone.

The transition to Jake could be worked into a great epiphany - that you realized that *some* people are willing to listen and accept, but you have to figure out how to tell them without scaring them away.  That you came to this realization because of how you and he interacted and how he sensed something important lurking, hiding in you.