The imagery in this is really nice.  However, the emotion the beginning of it created in me was peace and quiet and relaxation instead of depression which seemed your intent.  Maybe that’s because I’m already old .

I guess growing up looks that way for kids today, and that’s a real bummer.  I somehow managed to expect things to get better as I age and learn, and I it seems to have worked out that way.

By the way, should it be “brush” fire instead of “bush fire”?

‘The rain falls from the sky like shining bullets’...

Now that, my young wizard, is poetry…

Yeah, it’s “bush fire.” We call it that here. Thank you very much for your comments! I wrote this a while back after a truly boring term of English class learning all the different things about poetry, and my brain was so filled with it I had to sit down and write this.

Excellent second verse!

Could do with a little editing to improve the rhythm.