It’s so well written, but I worry that it’s too negative.

It’s a topic of its own, negativity.

Interesting, I wouldn’t have thought of it as negative, just a commentary, perhaps, on some classics of literature boiled down to the constituent natures of the characters and their peculiar dilemmas which otherwise would have never intersected. It is an experiment. Hmmm, negative, I will think about that some more, thank you.

Well, I’m not saying my comment is a particularly HELPFUL comment (now that I think about it).  I don’t think Franz Kafka’s work is exactly all butterflies and rainbows, yet Kafka is doing alright for himself.  (Your reference to the bug made me think of Kafka…)

God forbid you should edit this until it sounds like Wayne Newton with a hangover! 

Essentially… I’ve changed my mind.
It isn’t too negative. 
It’s just well-written.
Cheers!

Wayne Newton with a hangover sounds hot, hmmmm, let me work on that…

Well, Wayne Newton with a hangover does sound kind of negative.  Hmmm.  I wouldn’t work on that unless you absolutely have to!