This poem has a very “poetic” feel too it, which can be nice, the imagery is good and it is elusive as to its meaning, which can also be good. However, I am still not sure as to the actual meaning, such as, the person is trapped loving someone? Or, they lost someone and still come back to the love of them? I think it is a strong poem that needs a little tangible grounding, a very small sign post pointing the reader in the direction of its ultimate meaning. Still, nicely done.

Thanks for your comment. I wanted this to be elusive on purpose, and yes, it’s about a person trapped loving someone who couldn’t return the love. I’m so glad you liked it.

Sonja

I like “I am a mouse.”