Personally, I think this piece could have used a little more description. (ha ha)
All jokes aside, fantastic imagery. It has an etherial vibe going on, and I found myself thinking that it would neat to see an animated short based on it.I wondered about the children at the end. Are they yours?

Hmm…  I never considered what the children might be.  I’ve started looking at everything I ever wrote as allegorical and often find interesting new analogies that I had never intended to describe.  I think maybe the children represent humanity itself.  The orange is what we work for - maybe retirement?  The hill at the beginning is childhood.  Falling through the air is something I started writing about a lot after I graduated from college.

Anyway, I have three daughters, the youngest is the only one with brown hair and it is long and straight, so no, they’re not mine .