I can’t figure out what this means:
There is a mood bent in place
that extent to all pining to garner.

I like the fresh and simple rhythm in here. 

I’ve put a little effort into understanding some of the more complicated sentences (like the one above), but I didn’t feel successful.  Is this because I haven’t read enough?  Or maybe you just happen to enjoy putting words together in unexpected ways (“Life tops ajar to disclosure.”)?

I kinda liked the abrupt phrasing, the oddly but provocatively joined words offering more than simple description of events, but suggesting emotions and conflict that lie beneath the players lines. A bit like Nostradamus, without the prophecy. Well done